Some people think that the best way to be successful in life is to get a university education. Others disagree and say that nowadays, this is no longer true. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
In spite of the fact that the world is undergoing various changes in recent years, what are the key factors to achieving success still remains one of the most heatedly discussed issues. There are some people who argue that attending college is the best way to succeed, while others hold the opposite opinion. Personally, I prefer the latter.
The first reason why I cannot regard this as the best method lies in the fact that acquiring college qualifications alone can no longer be a superiority when facing the fierce competition today. In other words, with the approach of the knowledge society, some regions in the world have gradually achieved the popularization of higher education, and even in some developed countries, the number of graduate and doctoral students is also soaring, so only having received undergraduate education is no longer preferred by the company in the workplace. Besides, with social advances, the factors that promote success, such as better social relationships, family background, and personal appearance, have become more diversified, by which I mean without any conditions mentioned above, the probability of success is extremely slight even if one has graduated from the college.
In addition, there do exist better factors to achieve success. More specifically, the elements of a person's success can be divided into congenital conditions and acquired efforts. If a person is born with advantages in appearance, intelligence and wealth, making good use of these innate advantages can facilitate them to achieve success at a very young age, just like many young stars in China at present. However, for most ordinary people who do not obtain these inherited advantages, hard-working persistence, and determination are very important qualities. In other words, due to poverty or other reasons, even if someone gives up university education, and choose to be engaged in vocational work, as long as they persist in honing their own skills and insisting on innovation, they can also achieve achievements in their own fields.
Admittedly, although the definition of success is quite different for each individual, the fundamentals for achieving a goal will forever remain the same. As mentioned above, university education has been popularized in many countries, that is to say, this has become one of the most basic conditions in the current competition. However, if one wants to have an advantage over others in knowledge, people should not only meet the requirements of undergraduate education but also adhere to lifelong learning.
In conclusion, it seems to me that attending college is not the best way to achieve success mainly because there are other elements and methods to succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...s. More specifically, the elements of a persons success can be divided into congenital ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, still, while, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words, in spite of, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30555555556 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97302977376 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560185185185 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.4657458513 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.8 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228293269579 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705566510605 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504050326634 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124958562171 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159685443782 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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