Some people think that the best way to ensure road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding bikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the current society, raising legal driving age is considered to be the most efficient method to control road safety. While I accept that this method has some undeniable effects, I would argue that there are more appropriate solutions to tackle this problem.
On the one hand, increasing the minimum driving age can help reduce traffic accidents, thus improving the safety of drivers and pedestrians. To begin with, a large number of incidents are caused by young drivers every year. The main reason is that those drivers are not mature enough to understand the consequences of their careless driving and also inexperienced to handle unpredictable situations on the road. Therefore, by raising the driving age, authority can make sure that even the youngest drivers are aware of their responsibility for their own lives and other people’s lives when driving.
On the other hand, due to the fact that many youngsters drive without driving licence, this measure can only restrain traffic accidents in a minor scale. As a result, more pertinent solutions need to be applied widely. One of the most effective ways to enhance road safety is to impose more serious penalties on those who commit driving offences. For example, heavy fine could be imposed for people using alcohol while driving and taking away licences of relapsing drivers should also be considered. Another solutions is upgrading public transportation’s system. By speeding up vehicle boarding or reducing travel fares, mass transit can attract more passengers, that means less vehicles would be moving on the roads, therefore, traffic accidents would decrease in a larger scale.
In conclusion, while the increase in legal driving age may help reduce traffic accidents, there are still better methods to ensure road safety such as imposing harsh punishments and improving public transportation.
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It is believed that raising…
It is believed that raising the minimum driving age is the most effective method to improve road safety. While I accept that this approach has some effects in the short term, I believe that a longer-term and better solution is to impose stricter punishments for driving offences.
I think that increasing the minimum legal driving age can help reduce traffic accidents, thus improving the safety of roads. This is because a large number of traffic incidents are caused by young people’s careless driving. Many of them are not mature enough to fully understand the serious consequences of their actions or to be responsible for what they caused. Raising the driving age, therefore, can make sure that the youngest drivers are mature enough to take driving seriously and to protect their own lives and other people’s lives when driving.
In my opinion, however, this approach is only effective to a limited extent, due to the fact that nowadays many youngsters still drive without a driving licence. So, a more effective way to ensure road traffic safety is to impose more severe punishments on those who commit driving offences. For example, a longer prison sentence could be given for very serious offences and a heavier fine could be imposed for running a red light or driving without a helmet. These punishments could help deter potential offenders and prevent people from re-offending.
In conclusion, I believe that introducing stricter regulations for driving offences is a much better measure to increase road safety in comparison with increasing the minimum driving age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...d also be considered. Another solutions is upgrading public transportation’s syste...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun vehicles is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...can attract more passengers, that means less vehicles would be moving on the roads, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33220338983 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78649428791 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589830508475 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3815000216 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198598120218 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678729592988 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598939049788 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128171386062 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320715257079 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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