Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe that there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Opinions are divided as to whether or not prolonging the time that an offender is in prison is an optimal solution to the current escalating crime rate. In my opinion, while some assert that this way has some positive outcomes, other approaches should be taken into consideration.
On the one hand, there are some justifications why longer prison sentences are claimed to be the ideal solution. First, the longer perpetrators stay in jail, the more time they rehabilitate. Particularly, they can adequately reflect on their brutal actions and distinguish between right and wrong, which prevent them from reverting into crime when reintegrating into society. Second, the extension of confinement acts as a deterrent to people with intention of embarking on crime. For example, when the Vietnamese government raises the prison sentence for crime of passion from one to five years, the prospective offenders are reported to solve their problems in a more harmonious way rather than committing crime.
On the other hand, I believe that there are other enduring solutions to tackle crime problems. To begin with, law lessons should be integrated into core curriculum in order to raise residents’ awareness at the early stage of their life. To be more specific, when grasping the knowledge about terms of laws and punishment, students will refrain themselves from violating the regulations and become law-abiding citizens later in life. Furthermore, national authority needs to control the violent content of the media. In particular, it is said that crime scene should not be televised during peak hours because children might unintentionally imitate these unlawful actions and regard them as ways to vent their discontent.
In conclusion, although longer prison sentences might be perceived as a perfect solution, I believe that censoring the media content and education are better alternatives to decrease crime incidents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
Opinions are divided as to whether or not prolonging the time that an offender is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in particular, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44666666667 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97230924068 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616666666667 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9659055354 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.692307692 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202230710516 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692424207287 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496279509091 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132917980225 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391564210297 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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