Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?
In today’s world, most countries have shown great concern about the technologies used in schools. Controversy exists as to whether books should be stopped due to the popularity of videos, films, and computers. From my perspective, I remain unconvinced that videos, films, and computers will replace books.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to this view is that reading books makes humans emotionally intelligent. This is because while people read a book, their brains will imagine the event, the situation, the characters, and the details coming up described by the author. In fact, research at Emory University found that reading a novel heightens connection in the human brain. Therefore, reading can encourage people’s imagination. Meanwhile, videos, films, and computers provide apparent actions and records. That means there is no need for people to imagine anything related to the content of performances. Consequently, in this case, books are better than modern technologies.
In addition, one explanation to support this view is that reading improves concentration, while other technologies do not. In fact, studies in this field have shown that when people read a book, all of the brain's attention is focused on the story or gaining a better understanding of a particular topic. To put it in another way, the rest of the world just falls away and people can immerse themselves in every fine detail they are absorbing. For this reason, after this period, attention span is improved. One the contrary, videos and films lessen our focusing time. In reality, many statistics in this field indicated that the constant use of technologies has shortened our attention span from 12 minutes to 5 minutes. Furthermore, constant newsfeeds and videos that are 10 minutes or less have rewired our brains. To this extent, books are more suitable than technologies.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that books bring many benefits which other types of technologies cannot do, especially in emotion and attention. As a consequence of this, books will not be substituted by the amenity of modern technologies
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ies used in schools. Controversy exists as to whether books should be stopped due to the popu...
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Line 6, column 196, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ave shown that when people read a book, all of the brains attention is focused on the stor...
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Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'brains'' or 'brain's'?
Suggestion: brains'; brain's
...hat when people read a book, all of the brains attention is focused on the story or ga...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 788, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun minutes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...feeds and videos that are 10 minutes or less have rewired our brains. To this extent...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, may, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34117647059 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96915515811 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585294117647 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8006793416 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182347458625 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532105292932 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484053396841 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11562859669 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356203783903 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ies used in schools. Controversy exists as to whether books should be stopped due to the popu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 196, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ave shown that when people read a book, all of the brains attention is focused on the stor...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'brains'' or 'brain's'?
Suggestion: brains'; brain's
...hat when people read a book, all of the brains attention is focused on the story or ga...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 788, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun minutes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...feeds and videos that are 10 minutes or less have rewired our brains. To this extent...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, may, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34117647059 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96915515811 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585294117647 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8006793416 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182347458625 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532105292932 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484053396841 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11562859669 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356203783903 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.