Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
One school of thought holds that children should set a target to try to be the best in any activities they pursue. While I accept that this perception is somewhat justifiable, I would stand on the opposite view that it is unnecessary in some cases to try to be the first and it can lead to a detrimental effect among children.
On the one hand, the idea of striving for the best may have some potential benefits for youngsters. Firstly, it can prepare children for a pattern of progressive attitude for their future life. Hard work is one of the most important things to achieve both academically and in the work world. Secondly, without aiming to do their best, children may lack the motivation to do numerous things and are likely to reject them. With a high goal in mind, young children may have to work hard and do well in any field they are taking part in.
On the other hand, there are myriads of compelling reasons as I am convinced that it is irrelevant for children to try to get the first rank. First and foremost, it can be seen that not many activities require numerous skills or competition between children. For example, when joining in a normal game such as building a sandcastle, it is unnecessary to set a goal in mind that children must win this kind of game because having fun and delight moments with friends is the most priority aspect. Secondly, there is only one first-ranked, numerous children tend to lack confidence if they do not achieve this rank. As a result, it can put unfortunate pressure and lose their creativity and imagination, which is the main factor in the development of children.
In conclusion, although trying to do the best can provide a solid pattern of behavior for children in the future, I believe that the most vital thing in childhood life is being fun and having a great time with their friends and pursuing their interests, and not being affected by any pressure.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65102639296 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66239484928 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49853372434 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.1267818451 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224711675819 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085402164715 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582503507704 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139445806327 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366557315156 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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