Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.
It is thought that cultural traditions can be disappeared when they serve as places to make money and visitors are target audience. However, some individuals opine that it is the best solution to preserve the cultural traditions. Personally, I am not in favor of the latter view since there is another way to maintain the cultural traditions.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why people deem that cultural traditions will no longer exist when they are utilized as a way to boost local economies by attrating the attention of visitors. First of all, when used as tourist attractions to earn money, cultural traditions can make people have some misconceptions. To illustrate, youngsters can have a firm belief that cultural traditions exist to make money instead preserving traditional values of the past. Hence, there is no need for them to preserve those values anymore. Moreover, seeing that cultural traditions can increase profit of tourism industry in the area, people start to add other new cultures from other regions to attract more tourists. As a result, this phenomenon will blur the original traditions and lead to the disappearance of them. For instance, in Bat Trang village in Hanoi, people in this area have had a tradition of making pottery for thousand of years, however, people start to make other handicrafts such as handkerchief, which has blurred the tradition of making pottery.
On the other hand, I believer there is another method that can be applied to preserve the cultural traditions. First, through education, people can encourage students to have a sense of responsibility in maintaining the traditions in their hometowns. Since many children grow up and gravitate towards rural areas or other places to find a well-paid job, thus, educating them to be responsible for retaining traditional values is the best way to preserve cultural traditions. For example, to maintain the tradition of making pottery, children can learn how to make them and gain a crucial insight into the importance of preserving their traditions. Second, government can subsidize its money to preserve cultural traditions. To exemplify, government can pay higher salary for people whose job is traditional such as making pottery or sculpting. Therefore, more people will increase their preference toward traditional jobs. As a result, cultural traditions can be well preserved.
In conclusion, it is true that cultural traditions cannot exist when they serve as a purpose of being tourist attrations, however, this is not the most effective way in retaining cultural traditions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...e had a tradition of making pottery for thousand of years, however, people start to make...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28260869565 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93173934178 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475845410628 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4266266213 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.105263158 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78947368421 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336130877138 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127448162058 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743245845777 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232562413177 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504041748532 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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