Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists
Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion
Many are of the opinion that traditional cultures would be destroyed if people use them to earn money from tourists. Meanwhile, others hold that it is the best way to save and develop national traditions. This essay will discuss the logic behind both viewpoints and present why I am more inclined towards the latter.
On the one hand, people who think that money-making from attracting travelers will damage the traditional beliefs and customs in this day and age. Firstly, it has a detrimental impact on typical nations. In other words, using culture for money-making purposes can pose a threat to cultural identity because a few tourists may not be aware of the responsibility for preserving and protecting the stunning scenery of historical sites. For example, they engrave their names on the statue to save the memory when they have a chance to visit the famous place. Besides, traditional customs can be totally adapted to suit tourists' demands which can be lost their important values in the future. A good example is that the growing influence of Western culture in Vietnam. The young show their great respect for other nations and follow them instead of spreading the spirit and gaining a deeper insight of their country.
On the other hand, it is also understandable why others argue uniqueness as a way to develop the non-smoke industry needs to be justified and encouraged. The first reason supporting my view is that a cultural nation is needed to be preserved through advertising the visual on the internet or social media platforms to attract foreigners. In other words, investment in advertising helps them to enhance the number of visitors go to their country
and increase revenue depends on paying during a tour. For example, they give customers some vouchers when they accept to watch a short video showing national culture. As a result, users have a tendency to travel because of using the gifts and having a memorable vacation with their family
Moreover, heritages need to be restored and painted after a long period of time. This means that governments have to spend an enormous huge of money to pay for it. Hence, an image or symbol of tradition is essential that let visitors to have a comprehension of cultures.
In conclusion, while there are some drawbacks of wing money-making attractions aimed at tourists. I still agree with those who think that it is the most effective method to save these traditions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98529411765 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74362267776 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.516482056 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.052631579 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84210526316 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36022758706 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912248653839 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700769143821 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159564692465 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758749364291 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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