Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aims at tourists,other people believe that it is the only way to save such conditions in the world today.Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aims at tourists,other people believe that it is the only way to save such conditions in the world today.Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Tourism is always a controversial topic that under heavy discusses, with some people calling for a halt in fear of local tradition might be sabotaged, others believe the introduce of foreign traveler helps protect the traditional culture. Personally, I support the action of opening the gate.

Overly exploiting the local cultural such as costumes and ancient heritage would bring negative influences, while open the gate in a controlled way seldom incur the same threaten. Some places, in order to boost tourism, excessively emphasize the racial form and appearance while missed the ethnic core cultural. Some travel agency pretend to be traditional by forcing the local people wear the exaggerate customs and decorate their residency in an old-fashioned way, this, indeed, deceives the tourists and the infuriate local dwellers and thus impedes the sustainable development of local tourism industry, without coordination with the local, reaching an consensus agreement of a moderate open strategy. The introduce of foreign travelers would bring no benefits but interruption and sabotage towards the peaceful local lifestyle.

Conversely, if a healthy and sustainable pattern of tourism have being built, the financial benefits as well as the worldwide attention could hardly shake the traditional local culture. The tremendous economic reward is adequate enough for improve the local life, with a general income increase in every family, local people have more opportunity to embrace the world and freely choose their way of life. Meanwhile, the extinguish of a ethnic culture, by no means, own to the lack of physical material or economical support, but because of fewer people know its existence. Therefore, open the gate to under the word’s appreciation could help to prevent its demise.

In conclusion, a well organized tourism serves as positive force for culture promotion and preservation, and can always boosts the development of local business and job market.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 24.0651302605 25% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54934210526 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87569808157 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611842105263 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6707771068 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.363636364 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118218639189 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421777910214 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367312292826 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737866481156 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033715255479 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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