Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job. Others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Majority of people believe that attending tertiary education could give benefit to their career further. While, others thought some experiences during job is the most valuable. I personally believe, whether sceptics and advocates, that have significant impact upon people’s career.
To begin with, some people who agree that university is the best way to guarantee a good job think that there are a hundred of complex jobs required a certain knowledge that could only be obtained through the university. In addition, the advocates have own opinion that it is not only hard-skills – such as economics, mathematics, physics, and so on – people obtained from university, but also several soft-skills can be got.
On contrary, the sceptics do not agree such these viewpoints. The strongly argue that gain practical experiences as long as a certain job helps them to achieve a better position on their career. They thought that job experiences could give significant impact rather than continuing the study in the university too.
However, those who advocates and sceptics could not guarantee precisely that the better jobs they obtained keeps their own as long as possible, due to tough competition among the jobseekers. Hence, attending tertiary education and having job experiences are both critical for the brightest career. By the university, we could learn some soft-skills – leadership, management organization, and so on – that will be useful in the workplace. The job experiences help us to expand our knowledges theoretically as well as practically from the campus.
In conclusion, such skepticism is always occurring as juvenile’s trend after graduating from senior high school or collages because of worried about their future. The authorities – government, university, and company – should take responsibility to build a policy more comprehensively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d give benefit to their career further. While, others thought some experiences during...
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Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'certain knowledge'.
Suggestion: certain knowledge
... are a hundred of complex jobs required a certain knowledge that could only be obtained through the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53103448276 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11294332927 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579310344828 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1735855225 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.571428571 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229006282978 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744777631477 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590481578616 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120008806202 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607278349349 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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