Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while other think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while other think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Modem lifestyle brought profound changes in physical fitness, from small children to senior citizens. In this situation, some people are blaming the Govemment for the responsibility of increasing obosity in children, at the same time, on the other hand another part of society think, it is the fault of parents. I believe that the Government and Parents has to share the key role about this condition. Day by day, people are getting more busy and busier than before, and they didn't have time to take their food in proper time. This situation leads people to face severe health problems like obesity, Cardiac arrest and Blood pressure etc. But now a day, the situation turns disaster and children are also facing health problems like obesity due to lack of exercise. Negligence of government in society and carelessness of parents in home leads to the creation of these type of situations. Once upon a time, govemment had given initiative to all educational institutions and schools to maintain sports activities and physical fitness programs to children compulsorily. But at present competitive scenario schools and institutions exceeded authority's rules and regulations. At the same time, parents are showing interest towards to join their children in the type of schools which give importance to provide competitive exams but not in sports and physical fitness. these type of situations leads to increase obesity in children For instance, in recent news 12 years old boy put up his body weight 100 kilograms due to obesity Parents play a key role in this problem In this moden days taking good and nutritious food is a problematic task but consuming junk food or Street foods is an easy task. Moreover, parents or care takers are allowing their younger generations to eat junk foods like cakes and chocolates. In addition to this, video games and smartphone games occupied the space of physical gaming time. To change this situation, Parents must give a strict restriction to children in home to avoid eating junk food and playing smart phone games. One example from the recent survey by India today is 80% of children in India was suffering from the problem of obesity. Younger generation is the perishes wealth of the nation in future. So we have a responsibility to take care about their health and protection As per my perception, everything has its own significance so. Government and as well as Parents plays an equal and important damage making role in this problem.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 411.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02433090024 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72849106316 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557177615572 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6337239159 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.722222222 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148728230244 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436743642552 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652821182932 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148728230244 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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