Some people think it is more beneficial to play sports that are played in teams, e.g. football. However, some people think it is more beneficial to play individual sports, e.g. tennis and swimming. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
People have differing views with regard to the question of what kind of sport can bring them more benefit. While some argue that personal sports are more advantageous, in my opinion team sports can be a preferable choice.
On the one hand, some people prefer to play individual sports for a range of underlying reasons. Firstly, they believe that playing sports individually gives them this opportunity to be independent, meaning that in these types of games they need to take on the responsibility of their performance. This can improve the ability of making rational decisions spontaneously, which is a basic need to be autonomous. Secondly, having won the competition, athletic men, who have chosen the individual sports, are able to rise to fame and hence fortune personally. In fact, the supporters of this idea argue that individual sportsmen are more likely to make a name for themselves than those selecting a team sport. For example, Rafael, a professional tennis player, is one the most famous and richest sportsmen around the world, having this position as a result of choosing tennis.
On the other hand, the opposite group, including me, are of the opinion that playing sport in a team can have more positive impacts. They assert that those who are belonging to a group learn to cooperate with other members effectively, resulting in improving their social abilities. As an obvious example, Ali Dai, who is a professional soccer player in IRAN, is a successful businessman with the ability of collaboration, stemming from his experience in playing football. In addition, not only do sportsmen motivate their teammate to play their roles accurately, but they also assist each other to bear the extra pressure during the game. As a result, they may enjoy more.
In conclusion, although it seems that individual sports have some positive sides for athletic men, I believe that the advantages of playing sport in a team are more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08125 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85219213939 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5132140261 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.142857143 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7142857143 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263397391926 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977735884087 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761905950527 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179768823247 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314183904068 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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