Some people think it is more beneficial to play sports that are played in teams, e.g. football. However, some people think it is more beneficial to play individual sports, e.g. tennis and swimming. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

As all of us know we should do daily exercises to be healthier. There are arguments that either doing team sports is worthier or individual sports. The best choice between these sports categories, depends on different aspects like our age or money that we want to invest and so on but I believe that, as whole, team sports have more advantages.

In the one hand, I agree with that team sports help us to improve some of our abilities that need to live in our society much more than individual sports. Firstly, team sports help us to learn how we give a hand to each other to reach our goal and seems this is the most beneficial advantages of team sports. For example in football, one person is a goalkeeper and someone else is forward and each one has different ability but they help each other to reach final result. One other good aspect of team sports is we learn how to obey a superior commands and support juniors and it helps us in our firm to be best. Also in team sports, team is responsible for failure or success. For example in football, we say a football team defeated and lost the championship not a person.

On the other hand, personal sports have another benefits. Firstly, they are great source of motivation. In most cases there is a desirable element of competitiveness and it belongs only to one person, the winner. It can encourage us to work harder to outdo other competitors. For example in some famous tennis tournaments the prize of winner is about 1 billion dollars. Another advantages of sole sports is that it helps us to raise our self-esteem because our failure or success is depended on our-selves and on body else can inhibit us to be successful. For example Michael Phelps, who is then best current century swimmer, do swimming, running, riding and other practices 12 hours per day and 360 days in a year and finally he become such that fabulous swimmer.

To sum up, in my opinion both major type of sports have some suitable effects on our body and mind but it seems team sports have more effectiveness properties and it may be more helpful in our life.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, for example, in most cases, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57333333333 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54624638766 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517333333333 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8121813817 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.882352941 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124276019396 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042991942356 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450978279741 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900350391207 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363608132482 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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