Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life.
Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with.
Discuss both view.
It is argued in these days that the workplace is associated to two primary benefits that has enabled individuals boosting their income and facilitate for social interaction. Some people think that it is more conductive to socialise other relationship beyond the job environment. I contend that expansion of social networks has significant benefits.
On the one hand, it is commonly believed that possessing a job is the vital part in terms of personal development. The first prominent explanation is that individual’s occupations allow them to earn a living and prompt their prosperity. It is a widespread pratice that having a stable job makes workers to have higher position in society than those of unemployment. They have capacity to creat materials or possessions for the community as well as themselves. The second thing is that the occupational environment is home to broaden their relationship through communicating or working with colleges or bosses. For instances, If they encounter difficulties in own life, they can be more likely to be handled these obstacles by assistance from acquaintances in the office.
One the other hand, there is a growing recognition that growthing other other relationship should be placed more emphasis than working environment for some reasons. Initially, the family contributes an dispensable part in people’s lives that need be consolidated on a daily basic. In fact, After finishing working, employees have tendency to be their family where parents may brings pleasure and cosy atmosphere. As a result, it is essential that we have to establish family bonds to be more well-being in practicial life. Furthermore, soul mates also have considerable impacts on every individual, people have desire to share interests or sadness with the core friends, this makes them to put down their pressure and have a positive outlook on life.
In conculsion, it seems to me that workplace is the crucial part to built social life and increase people’s finance. However I firmly believe that to comprehensive growth, individiuals have to expand and consolidate current relationship such as family and the best friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, well, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37647058824 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20369596249 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579411764706 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0208273087 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.25 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176891808009 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559309390573 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550397957483 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116309006109 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453157650616 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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