Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals.
Discuss both these views and give your own reason.
There are two different views on the allocation of financial resources. Some people believe that it is essential to spend it on the creation of big and spectacular buildings while others think that it should be for the improvement of education and hospital facilities. Although the former may give the city a possible tourist spot; thus boosting its economy, i feel that people can benefit more if the school and hospital buildings are improved.
On the one hand, one reason why people opt to have the money spend on huge and splendid buildings is that it can boost the tourism of the city. A city with such buildings can have the potential to be known worldwide and may boost the economy of the city. For example, mall of Asia in Manila, is known for being one of the largest malls in the Philippines and it actually has boost not only the city's economy status but also of that the country. Another reason, if the said building is a mall, it can accommodate several number of boutiques, restaurants and sport centers, therefore, increasing the possible job opportunities.
On the other hand, the improvement of health and educational facilities are much more important than any form of buildings. Each person studying or staying in these kind of buildings can have more convenience and they can experience comfort. For instance, larger classrooms and bigger hospital wards will become less crowded and it may decrease stress for both students and patients. these are much more beneficial since there is, afterall, an increasing number of students and sometimes, patients every year. Furthermore, renovating the school areas so that it will be conducive for learning and setting up state-of-the-are equipment in health care facilities are important.
In conclusion, people think that money should be spent on constructing buildings that are both large and has an outstanding architectural design, but I feel that it should be spent on the expansion and renovation of schools and hospitals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07598784195 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86817053104 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.4616778147 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.461538462 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3076923077 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345540449528 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107705068865 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089608345684 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214559996697 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816468820301 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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