Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Some people believe that children should be educated to be good individuals in society by the school, others argue that parents should take these responsibilities into their consideration. From my perspective, I would strongly advocate the latter idea that parents should be the one to provide moral lessons to their offspring.
To begin with, the school provides a wide range of knowledge and helps the kids to develop their health and extrinsic skills. however, since the proportion of students is limitless, it is illogical for schools to have cautious training for them. As a result, the kids are more likely to progress in their own ways, and hence, it is extremely challenging to ensure whether the children are developing in a positive or negative way. For instance, children are mostly affected by their fellows’ behaviors, and thus there are chances for them to develop their thoughts and even attitudes towards others, in both bad and good ways.
Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I believe that parents are those who are bonded tightly with their kids. Consequently, it is convinced that they can totally understand their kids, and thanks to that, the approaches of mom or dad to their offspring are likely to happen more fluently and naturally. Also, it has been proven that kids have strong liability to their family members, so they may feel comfortable receiving lessons from their parents. To illustrate, many children’s attitudes are the result of their families’ well-being and the way their parents treat them over a long period.
To conclude, since now it is probably difficult to decide who is appropriate to raise the children to become good members of society. however, I think that parents can undoubtedly help their children to achieve positive results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, well, apart from, for instance, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18088737201 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77191103398 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58361774744 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2257660886 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183861670766 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764182980168 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944100022927 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135505903188 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981358025115 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.