Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both views and give your own experience.
Educating children to become good citizens is presumably thought to be the role of their parents. However, some people might suggest that it should be done by the schools. Personally, I can understand both of these opposing point of views. I consider the roles of parents and the educating systems to be equally important in the development of children.
On the one hand, I appreciate the view that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. The majority of a child's early stage of development is spent with their parents. Therefore, it is obvious that the personalities and characteristics of a child is formed gradually through the interactions and experience they have had with their parents. For example, if the parents are protective and demand certain rule within the household, the children will grow up to be respectful and well-behaved towards them. In contrast, those who are nurtured in a more relaxed, flexible way will likely to become more independent and self-reliant.
On the other hand, I understand why some people may view schools as an important factor in the education of children. Teachers can provide basic knowledge in a wide variety of fields for students from science-related subjects to social ones. This in turns will help students expand both of their academic and social knowledge, become more equipped for the future jobs. In addition, schools are compared as miniature societies, meaning that children can build new relationships and interact with different people from various backgrounds when going to schools. By doing so, children will familiarize themselves with different social contexts and thereby becoming more adaptable to the society.
From my perspective, the contribution of the family and education systems are equally essential, each with unique and different functions and roles. While parents can help nurturing children's personalities, schools can be useful in providing foundation knowledge on a wider scale. It is therefore important to combine both factors as they are greatly essential for the development of children.
In summary, a child's growing stage depends heavily on the contribution of both family and education environment. By helping to balance between the two roles, we can help children to become better citizens of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 173, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to nurture' or 'nurture'.
Suggestion: to nurture; nurture
...tions and roles. While parents can help nurturing childrens personalities, schools can be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in contrast, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36784741144 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99109841621 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514986376022 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.876395524 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.684210526 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220152892514 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734512029408 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843898747528 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121466738217 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504579350822 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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