Some people think that personal happiness is directly affected by economic success. Some others, however, think that there are completely different factors that are more important. Discuss both views and give you opinions
Happiness is what every individual tends to pursue in their entire life. While some believe that financial success leads to the state of being happy, others argue that different factors are more essential in achieving happiness. This essay will discuss both viewpoints.
On the one hand, it can be argued that money is crucial for people's life. In fact, everyone needs money to cover their primary demand, including food, accommodation, paying bills. In addition, since many people may consider owning possessions, such as luxury cars, high-class apartments, as a sense of fulfilment, they seem to revere the role of money. Furthermore, when being financially stable, people may not be worried about monetary aspects, which can enable them to focus attention on other things creating happiness. Thus, economic success can guarantee people a stable life.
On the other hand, other factors can contribute to personal satisfaction. Firstly, social connections can nurture people's mentality needed to maintain happiness. As an example, emotional support and sharing from families and friends can infuse people with motivation preventing them from falling depression when tough times befall them, which financial success alone may not fail to do. Secondly, health is a prerequisite to enjoy life to the fullest. In fact, most people tend to prioritize economic goals over staying healthy until they become wealthy. Consequently, those tend to lead a sedentary lifestyle and get overwhelmed by work stress. In the long run, their degraded health would deter them from living a satisfying life. Therefore, social links and health play a vital part in individual fulfilment.
In conclusion, financial achievements can stabilize people's material life. However, I believe that better connections with others and remaining healthy can help them acquire more happiness.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55087719298 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76775168125 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649122807018 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6434135189 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8888888889 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72222222222 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149587784396 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489116922264 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533247667699 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104412267179 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585780632754 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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