Some people think that public health is a responsibility of the government while others think that people should be responsible for their own health.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Opinions are different on whether authorities are the responsible party for public health or if it is the locals' responsibility. As far as I am concerned, both should take a part of this responsibility.
Governments, on the one hand, can implement several strategies to improve public health, so they are partly responsible. They control almost the entire food options in their countries. It is undeniable that diets play a significant role when it comes to public health. For instance, fast food outlets are notorious for their unhealthy meals. If governments restrict the overspreading of these, many benefits will be gained for the betterment of public health. Another way by which authorities can affect local's general health is by building a large number of gyms and training centres in all cities and rural areas, or even by placing simple training equipment in public parks. This is likely to encourage citizens to have a more active lifestyle by using these facilities, which would benefit their health.
However, people are also responsible for their health. Food and exercise freedom is a human right, and no one is allowed to control the food options or the physical activities of people. Even children, who are not mature enough to decide on these, should naturally be responsible by their parents. If governments apply all needed strategies to encourage a healthy lifestyle, the last say will always be for people themselves. To illustrate this, take smoking for example. Although nearly all smokers are aware of the detrimental and devastating effects that smoking has on their health, they still smoke. Thus, it is almost impossible for governments alone to control public health, let alone being solely responsible for it.
In conclusion, while governments are capable of limiting unhealthy diets and promoting training among inhabitants, the latter still have the free will to either accept or reject these attempts. Therefore, blaming one side for the deterioration of public health and exempting the other seems not logical to me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'locals'' or 'local's'?
Suggestion: locals'; local's
...party for public health or if it is the locals responsibility. As far as I am concerne...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ct locals general health is by building a large number of gyms and training centres in all cities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26443768997 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89260793112 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1339072032 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2222222222 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360854436859 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116828284063 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910456189463 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211960291212 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603759231436 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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