Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both views and give you opinion.
It is often argued that parents should be responsible for nurturing their offspring to become effective in their countries. However, others think that it is the school’s responsibility to do such a job. In my opinion, I strongly believe that both parents and schools are evenly responsible for making good, and promising children.
On the one hand, parents have an obvious role on parenting their children to become effective in society; they are the ‘’first planters’’ of these young seeds. This is because pre-school children usually do not meet people other than their parents. Additionally, at a such sensitive age, children are entirely ready to learn the life, and everything learned in this age often lasts forever. Research by Cairo Psychology Centre in 2013 stated that approximately 53% of an individual’s goals and traits are determined at the age of four or five years. Therefore, parents are enormously responsible for what they ‘’feed’’ their children during this very young receptive age.
On the other hand, schools also have an indisputable impact on paediatrics. At as an early age as six years, a significant part of children’s time is spent at schools with their teachers. Therefore, teachers have huge influence on children. Furthermore, children at this age tend to have a ‘’role-model’’, and in their situations, a teacher appears to be the closest person. For that, he or she needs to be very keen and careful on teaching them valuable ethics and morals. If you listen to some distinctive successful stories, you will probably hear something like ‘’my teacher was a positive motive to me when I was in school’’.
In conclusion, it is evident from what has been discussed above that both parents and teachers have great and obvious influence on children, as they meet them early in life and contribute largely to shaping their characters. Therefore, I opine that both sides should be considerably responsible for bringing young individuals up in a healthy way that leads to society prosperity.
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...sible for bringing young individuals up in a healthy way that leads to society prosperity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43333333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.8747718319 2.80592935109 138% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.401063855 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0625 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203340380325 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786994211941 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050242733423 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14151757805 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502659157777 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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