Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that the question of whether to reward students with the highest scores or those who perform improvements remains a source of controversy in the education field. While a number of people believe that pupils who show the best academic achievements deserve awards, I would argue that offering rewards for those showing improvements is more reasonable.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why schools should reward students having excellent performances. Firstly, this could create a competitive studying environment among students. As almost all children have a strong desire to win, they will try harder to get good scores at school. Therefore the students’ quality of study can be improved. The second reason is that the best students are identified based on their academic results. As a result, they can be given special attention to develop their abilities. For example, my high school usually organizes contests among students to find out the most talented ones and then gives them extra classes to nuture their capabilities for national competitions.
On the other hand, I believe that giving encouragement to students trying hard in their study results is more important. The first reason is that this will give equal chance for all students to receive rewards. Knowing that their improvements are appreciated, pupils are motivated to try even harder and achieve greater results. Moreover, that students are awarded for their progress can promote their learning for enjoyment and understanding, not just for high grades. Consequently, some phenomena such as exam pressure or cheating to score high marks would be reduced.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better to give encouragement to students who have improved their academic performance than to those having the highest marks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
It is true that the question of whether to reward students with the highest sco...
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Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ry harder to get good scores at school. Therefore the students’ quality of study can be i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29530201342 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82042138906 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593959731544 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.323308268 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.2 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324471109777 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10154508485 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911861920748 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20518453213 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900490466694 0.056905535591 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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