Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children’s who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Many one of the opinion that children should be encouraged
to be more competitive, while others hold that it is necessary to
teach children how to be cooperative as well as become more
useful adults. This essay will discuss the logic behind both
viewpoints, and then present why I'm more inclined towards
the latter.
On the one hand, people who think that children should be
encouraged to be competitors in order to help them learn a sense of
competition have their own rationales. First of all, it would be an
appropriate opportunity for children who want to show their talents
and knowledge. As a result, they might have more experience,
follow their dreams, and record great achievements when they participate in competitions. Besides, they can solve problems by themselves and be more self-confident. In addition, children who work, think critically, and be winners would have an attractive profile to the recruiters and prepare for the real world to work or apply to universities. However, winning is not everything. This means that being a winner of the competition would lead children to ignore compassion and generosity. Moreover, they can regard and have bad behaviors with others.
On the other hand, it is understandable why others argue that concentrating on cooperation is more important when teaching children to become useful adults. One of the most compelling reasons is that modern society needs teamwork and communication to achieve specific goals. In other words,
chances to develop their soft skills and improve their abilities to listen and communicate to choose the right way for their plans. Apart from that, the value of co-operation should be taken into consideration. For instance, it helps children work together, add more friends, and enhance their network. This tends to be willing to work with others and contribute effectively
to the community. Therefore, teamwork or cooperation has
positive effects on their academic performance at school, and
thus their future in the long term.
In conclusion, while there are some benefits of a sense of
competition in children, I still agree with those who think
that children need to be taught how to co-operate effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3014084507 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97871307797 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560563380282 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4757181637 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.555555556 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0555555556 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.38176352705 434% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38935760479 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113597301002 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116569145224 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12636578514 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979948193311 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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