some people think that sports involving violence such as boxing martial art should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competition to what extent do you agree

Essay topics:

some people think that sports involving violence such as boxing martial art should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competition to what extent do you agree?

In the modern world, many people are willing to live in peace and quiet. In this regard, some individuals keen to think that few types of sports involving violence such as kick boxing and martial arts should be prohibited from the mass media as well as the International competitions.

It is true that these activities are beneficial for well being, if the sportsmenfollow the safety rules during the training process, in this sense security is essential for the health of athlete, if these activities are prohibited from TV, it can lead to the negative outcomes such as deterioration of physical growth of the individuals.To illustrate, some people do these sports because it is beneficial for their health. As a result, these people made not do these activities if its banned from the authorities.

On the other hand, it is clear that many people have made the sports people who offend them because of their physical strength. In this sense the people utilise their ability for the negative purposes such as vandalism and kidnapping. These changes influence on the development of the other type of sports, due to the popularity of boxing and martial arts people interested in them. Accordingly, other type of sports, such as in intellectual games are not well developed. In this reason prohibiting boxing can be beneficial for the chess and checker.
To recapitulate, although, some people think that these sports are banned because of their violence, but some feel that this decision can lead to the negative outcome. Personally, I believe that these sports do not be banned, as they can benefit to the health of many individuals.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, so, well, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03308823529 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85365885076 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466911764706 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.7223947648 49.4020404114 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.454545455 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7272727273 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340948735554 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131362652458 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1043348621 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230923283656 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950369833779 0.056905535591 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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