Some people argue that the adolescents should spend their leisure time on helping local communities without payment of salary and some others think that this circumstance not only contribute to the society but also to individual teenagers. I totally disagree with this point of view and this essay will explain on it.
On the one hand, some people think that teenager can help local communities without the payment can achieve their accomplishment as well as contribute the society, if those adolescents can spend their time to help the society that can build their personal achievement by helping people. Therefore, people think this is a double win to those teenagers to do unpaid job for helping their local communities and also getting the achievement from this action.
On the other hand, those teenagers have already endured variety of pressure from school and family. Study is sort of full-time job for those teenagers and they should also spend time to do their homework after school. Therefore, they will force to get more pressure if they have to use their spare time to do more job. Furthermore, some of adolescents who need to give the financial support for their family. They don’t even have much time to have a good rest between study and work not to mention to work for the society.
In conclusion, although that encouraging adolescents help their local communities is benefit for both individual teenagers and local society, but it should be consider if this strategy will cause some negative impacts and pressures on our teenagers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'getting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: getting
...fter school. Therefore, they will force to get more pressure if they have to use their...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the adolescents') or simply say ''some adolescents''.
Suggestion: some of the adolescents; some adolescents
...spare time to do more job. Furthermore, some of adolescents who need to give the financial support ...
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Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considered'?
Suggestion: considered
...ers and local society, but it should be consider if this strategy will cause some negati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, sort of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07392996109 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63979034934 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498054474708 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7137370934 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.545454545 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421494338996 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158606507715 0.084324248473 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855035793507 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260876760932 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431419534746 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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