Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is a growing recognition that after leaving high school, youngsters should enter on tertiary school for personal progress. Meanwhile some opponents think that doing some occupations like car mechanics or builders will bring positive impacts on community. I am of opinion that every decisions have own merits. In this essay I will analyze for detailed in these issues.
On the one hand, it is commonly believed that there are some reasons as to why choosing to pursuit high education is beneficial for society. First prominent problem is that university is home to learners fulfill their dream in variety of careers like engineers or doctors that need be trained more intensive. In fact, these science jobs place more emphasis than manual work. It is driving force for social and economic prosperity. The second reason that is worth to mention is that high school leavers are favorable in continuing for university due to avoiding arduous work that gains low-salary. It is unusual that when participants possess high qualification, this means that they can promote in the years ahead and have desired income. They also make great contribution for community by their capacity. It is common in these days, affluent people have tendency to take part in charity activities.
One the other hand, working some manual work like car mechanics or builders may have advantages directly on some extent in society. Initially, in the competitive labor market, many graduates may not seek a job thereby leading increasing rate of unemployment. For instance, in Viet Nam, millions of students graduating in an accountant or management have to do drivers or shippers in order to earn a living. From this phenomenon, it need be realized that instead of pursuit tertiary school, youngsters may do manual work that is more economical and effective.
Moreover, some works pay less attention but it is extremely essential in modern word. The clear evidence for this is that in developing countries, society is insufficient growth to automate all tasks. Therefore builders are so important in construction houses or traffic system.
In conclusion, it seems to me that decision in go to university brings advantageous benefits for community in the near future. However I think that car mechanics or builders are necessary careers for better lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21276595745 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81757784404 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593085106383 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7979098292 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211153294731 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543473456675 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054069454224 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109574889633 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339573185471 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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