Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that many people are living much longer, the retirement age should be raised considerably. While there are some benefit for raising the retirement age, I would argue not raising the retirement age is the best choice.
On the one hand, it is extremely expensive to support people for so long in retirement. Pensions are paid partly by people in their working life but today pension schemes would yield less money than necessary because they were designed for shorter periods. In addition, the young is end up working harder for the enjoyment of the old. This is fundamentally unfair.
Turning to the advantages of not raising the age at which people retired from work. First, when old people retire from work later, they deprive young people of the opportunity to work and develop. Second, not only people who are earning money are valuable members of the society, but also retired people. Retired people can contribute a great deal through sharing family responsibilities and also in wider community, by doing voluntary work.
In conclusion, i think we should maintain the current retirement age and allow people to develop in different ways when they are retired.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...doing voluntary work. In conclusion, i think we should maintain the current re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 1615.20841683 61% => OK
No of words: 196.0 315.596192385 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0612244898 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6028010094 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627551020408 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 506.74238477 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3896842606 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1818181818 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454093941856 0.244688304435 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177670443275 0.084324248473 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165376674353 0.0667982634062 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259359060723 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148083263911 0.056905535591 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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