Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, longevity among people has been recorded as higher than ever. Thus, it is suggested that companies and organizations should raise the age that people are allowed to retire. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this for two main reasons. First, this trend would have an adverse effect on people's performance at work and second, it is detrimental to the young workforce.
In terms of the performance of people at the workplace, when people get older, their health may not as good as they are young. This results in the weakening of the physical and mental conditions among people because they are prone to various potential health issues such as dementia and tiredness. In fact, many companies and organizations nowadays encourage people to take extra shifts in the purpose of boosting products produced. However, if people are not doing well due to the lack of health, they will not be able to make any significant contribution.
Apart from the reason expressed above, the tendency of increasing the age that people retire from work also poses a problem to the young workforce. This is the case because the more the elderly keep working in their companies, the more challenging that young people find when searching for a job position. Therefore, the increasing rate of unemployment among them could be easily witnessed. For example, although the retirement age of Vietnamese workers is 60-year-old, it still makes it virtually impossible for graduates to apply to their wanted companies due to the abundant number of workers.
In conclusion, it is true that the average age of people in recent years has significantly been high. However, I believe that there are two main problems derived from it, including the low-quality performance at work and the shortage of job positions among the young workforce.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13712374582 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80660399488 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561872909699 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.72831849 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277045240971 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947798844431 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477489977479 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164320161124 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268869858624 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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