Some secondary schools provide students with a general education across a range of subjects whereas others focus on fewer subjects releated to a particular career.
Do you think the advantages of a focused education outweigh the disadvantages?
Giving pupils a wide range of subjects in the secondary level of schools is favoured by many people over concentrating on a few classes related to certain types of career. While there could be found diverse pros, personally, I am convinced that disadvantages fairly outweigh the advantages.
To begin with, the major advantage of learning students only certain subjects could be perspective, if their parents and ,certainly, children decided the future career. Clearly, if the student found himself as a future lawyer, he would not need the technical classes, such as math and physics, that similarly will help them to concentrate to specific field of knowledge. To give an example, I choose a form, which is specialised in learning various languages, for the reason, that I simply do not need the variety of all subjects, that are tought in my school.
On the other hand, there are still a lot of cons of focused education. The main researches had shown by the year 2018, that major part of the youngest part of the population has lost their creativity. Consequently, more attention should be paid to these types of classes, suchlike painting, drama lessons, music. However, due to the focused education most of the little ones simply do not received these important skills, which could be their hidden strong sides.
What is more, the process of growing includes a lot of diverse aspects of children's life, and the whole potential is also regarded. It means, that many kids just lose their interest to one things, and become more engaged in another; meanwhile the focused education will only direct them in one way, like a one way trip, which will continue highlighting, that other subjects do not as important, as already selected. Unfortunately, for instance, a great part of children begins to hate things, that they are usually do, which can means only that they will have worked by the future time in another field.
To sum up, there is a possibility to everyone to choose an aimed method of studying, though, to my way of thinking, learning a range of subjects in the secondary school will definitely help to become an individuality with different interests and knowledges.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, second, similarly, so, still, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02459016393 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7526017271 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568306010929 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5584998504 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.461538462 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209658972838 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657943637274 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538872609201 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108934356888 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182307850008 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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