In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The tendency towards people consuming junk food is increasingly prevalent, which leads to obesity and other weight-gain problems. Thus, this advertising campaign should be prohibited. In my opinion, while advertising junk food would take its toll on the daily eating habit of people, I think that awareness among them is more important.
In terms of junk food advertisement, most industries nowadays strive to draw public attention as much as possible into the product that they want to launch, which is fast food or junk food. The aim is to approach consumers, who are young and have no time to prepare daily meals, so workers or even youngsters can be susceptible to this. This type of food does not require a lot of time to prepare as well as to finish. Consequently, not only do people meet their eating needs, but they also fulfil their satisfaction, and any problem such as obesity or overweight is perhaps unavoidable.
Apart from the influence of junk food advertising expressed above, I believe that it does not contribute to the problem of obesity because awareness among people is the deciding factor. Individuals, who are health-conscious and have a keen understanding of food ingredients, are more likely to prevent weight-related problems from happening in the first place. It means that no matter how many times that they watch junk food advertisement; if they want to pay proper attention to their physical and mental health, they would not eat junk food on a regular basis. For example, adults favour eating at home over eating out because it is not necessary to consume junk food, which is full of health-related risks.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the presence of junk food is becoming evident within society. Although obesity can be attributed to junk food advertisement to some extent, I believe that human factors are more significant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, thus, well, while, apart from, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09061488673 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96455674329 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572815533981 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4545702198 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395216785805 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143904104813 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781288674993 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249529257238 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286223018939 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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