In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
obesity has become a matter of great concern as well as considered as a primary problem in many countries. many people assert that this obesity problem has been increasing due to fast food advertising and restricting these adverts would be a better solution while others claim that limiting commercial promotions could not be an efficacious idea at all. In this both opposing views will be discussed before reaching to a conclusion.
On the one hand, there is no denying the fact that junk food advertisements can motivate us in many ways. First of all, it is true that people usually have a tendency to taste foreign or local delicious foods that are offered by many restaurants through advertising. Thus, they cannot resist themselves to fulfil their fascination and it is apparent that people are getting information about this through advertisements. if advertisements are limited or banned, their extreme interest on junk food would be declined. Another aspect regarding to this is that, some restaurants or eateries offer numerous promotions such as 'buy one get one offer' etc. which are more potentially influencing factors for the people. people cannot but resist themselves from accepting these offers. Therefore, by getting information through advertisements people are taking more junk food that results in obesity problem.
On the other hand, it is argued and i strongly believe that banning advertisements cannot be a proper solution to mitigate the obesity problem. one obvious reason associated with this is that obesity may happen genetically.For instance, i saw many of my friends are quite fat only because their parents are fatty. In addition, taking more and more fast food is totally a personal choice. it is person's problem that he or she could not resist himself or herself properly. advertising authority will provide their promotions for their business prosperity. if we cannot tackle ourselves, advertising authority is not quite responsible for this. So advertising should not be banned.
In conclusion, though both views have strong reasons to believe, i firmly hold the viewpoint that banning advertising due to mitigate the obesity problem will not be an imperative solution.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37606837607 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94185997996 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549857549858 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4911610158 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3157894737 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05263157895 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387094348267 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117079401269 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821551646426 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224547014889 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573839479929 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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