People have different views with regard to the question of who should take the responsibility for financial assistance of people who have been retired. While it can be argued that governments should be ultimately responsible due to their enormous financial capacity, I am of the opinion that the retired individuals should hold this duty.
On the one hand, governments might be asked to pay for caring costs of retired people since their fundamental role is to provide all kinds of people in the community with a happy and qualified life, and the retired group is no exception. This could be explained by the fact that people who have stopped working, will not receive a monthly stable salary to earn their living, therefore, the government should supply these residents with a small sum of money every month for daily expenditures such as accommodation, food, clothing and so on. Moreover, it is necessary for the government to support retirees who used to contribute to the development and existence of the state system. A good example in this case is retired individuals whose old careers are doctor and teacher. On the grounds that they had made such a significant contribution to the development of national education and medication, they deserve to get a decent pension from the government after finishing their jobs.
On the other hand, I contend that retirees who have their own comprehensive possession may not essentially require to receive financial support from the governments. The reason is that retired people could afford their own expenses on a daily basis by their independent financial budget. For example, a businessman who has no longer taken over his business, will not need state financial support due to his huge assets gained from a long-term period of time working. As a result, the national fund should be used in more practical and meaningful affairs such as giving impoverished children an opportunity to go to school and giving a hand to disabled people and residents in poor regions rather than financially assisting retired people when they have already had a well-qualified life.
In conclusion, while the government might be asked to provide retired citizens who have no financial budget, with a fixed fund to sustain their lives, I maintain that the retirees who have their own adequate fortune may not necessarily need a state financial supplement.In my opinion, I believe that the quality of retired people's lives will be promoted by the government's better investment in free healthcare services and elderly facilities rather than financial provision.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have stopped working, will not receive a monthly stable salary to earn their livi...
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Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'receiving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: receiving
... possession may not essentially require to receive financial support from the governments....
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...his huge assets gained from a long-term period of time working. As a result, the national fund...
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Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...arily need a state financial supplement.In my opinion, I believe that the quality ...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s rather than financial provision.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19477434679 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91178656911 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.916189696 49.4020404114 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.25 106.682146367 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0833333333 20.7667163134 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29060964339 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109924604841 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563848638194 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196539122693 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461182657283 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have stopped working, will not receive a monthly stable salary to earn their livi...
^^
Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'receiving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: receiving
... possession may not essentially require to receive financial support from the governments....
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...his huge assets gained from a long-term period of time working. As a result, the national fund...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...arily need a state financial supplement.In my opinion, I believe that the quality ...
^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s rather than financial provision.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19477434679 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91178656911 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.916189696 49.4020404114 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.25 106.682146367 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0833333333 20.7667163134 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29060964339 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109924604841 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563848638194 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196539122693 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461182657283 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.