Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
One of the most difficult and important decisions a young person must make is whether to stay in their hometown, closer to family, or to move away and live in a new place. While both sides have their positive points, I would advocate for the latter option, since it is difficult to grow as a person unless you see more of the world.
When I first finished school, I opted to move to Chinatown in New York City, where I then lived for a few years. That time proved to be vital to who I have since become, largely because I had my first real exposure to cultures other than my own. Although I had certainly met people from other countries before, Chinatown was a new world to me. I learned to appreciate how widely different cultures’ foods can vary, for example. Moving away also created job opportunities for me. Within a month of moving to New York, I was working as a cook in a very highly rated restaurant, which is exactly what I wanted to do. Leaving home allowed me to figure out who I wanted to be in a way that wasn’t possible in my hometown.
Yet, some people are unwilling to leave home because doing so would require giving up something very precious--a deep sense community. A few years ago, one of my boyhood friends suffered a serious injury in a boating accident. My hometown community pitched in to help pay his medical bills and take care of some of his daily needs like cooking and grocery shopping. This overwhelming demonstration of support is a relatively normal occurrence in my hometown. People look out for one another, and help each other in myriad ways. Feeling deeply connected to others is reason enough to keep many within the community as young adults.
To sum up, indeed, when I left my hometown as a teenager, I could feel my safety net had been removed from below me. It was scary, but it was exactly what I wanted at the time. The adventure of taking risks and meeting new people has shaped my life in countless ways. That’s why, for me at least, leaving my hometown was the best choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, while, at least, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54716981132 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55433467983 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587601078167 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0234505486 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7894736842 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216539256194 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597568522083 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439612691738 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13031635288 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484724861407 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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