Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people can earn a lot of money by dong sport as their professional work. While other professions earned it working so hard in offices, hospital or other government and private sectors. Some people think this is unfair for those profession who have finished highest degree in university.

To start with, there are a lot of people these days are working sports as this is their profession. Sports player chose this because they have a high salary especially if they won the game. Their job is not easy at all it takes a lot of practice before they can play the game around the world. However, some people say that professional sports has the highest pay than to those person who are professional by their degree in college. They worked in some institution in their country overtime and underpaid. For instance, a doctor working 24 hours in hospital for 5 times a week and yet some of them are not well compensated.

On the other hand, people who are working by profession gets a low-income because of poor governing. Sometimes it came out unfair for others because they are comparing the salaries of each profession and they do not know that government officials are not equal. For example, governments have a lot of fund for sports gaming, unfortunately they do not have a budget when it comes to hospitals, schools, community people and for poor people in rural area.

To sum up, it is not unfair if sports profession get the highest income unlike to person working by their professions are not well compensated. It is a matter of people on choosing their passion on how to serve their country .

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Average: 8.5 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this profession' or 'those professions'?
Suggestion: this profession; those professions
...s. Some people think this is unfair for those profession who have finished highest degree in uni...
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Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'finished the highest'.
Suggestion: finished the highest
...is unfair for those profession who have finished highest degree in university. To start with,...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this person' or 'those people', 'those persons'?
Suggestion: this person; those people; those persons
...onal sports has the highest pay than to those person who are professional by their degree in...
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Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ir passion on how to serve their country .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, to start with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76428571429 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65480427046 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3744828971 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229914427118 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953248856331 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06588552572 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159395382827 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943203357514 0.056905535591 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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