Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
In today’s world sports has emerged as a highly paid profession. Famous sportsmen and women earn even more than Doctors nowadays. While some people believe that it is justified other’s are of the view that it is unfair to other important professions. In my opinion it is justified. Analyzing the popularity aspect of sports and a short professional career will prove our point.
Firstly, not all the sportspersons get high sums of money for their performances. It is highly variable and depends a lot on luck and physical form at a particular time. For example Boxer Aamir khan, who was unbeatable in the start of his career, but with time popularity has decreased and is not earning as much as he was doing before. He was paid a lot for his popularity and liking initially which has significantly reduced nowadays. Thus short span of times of popularity justifies the high incomes.
Secondly, almost every sportsperson has a very short professional career. For a footballer the maximum professional span is for ten years. Most of them look for alternate jobs and invest in other businesses for money. For instance many cricketers in Pakistan has resided to do cloth business as a source of income. Thus lack of regular income and financial support helps to prove our stance in favor of high pays for sportspersons.
Nevertheless, some people argue that people with high qualification should be pain comparable to sportspersons. Although it seems to be logical but the fact that these professions have a continuous development and a constant financial benefit makes them less important in comparison to sportspersons.
In conclusion, sportspersons have a short career and limited time to perform and earn money in their life. In my opinion it is justified that sportspersons earn a great deal more money than other important professions. In future, the government needs to give these people permanent jobs in order to support themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12539184953 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08661722668 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9082726585 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.75 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.95 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253320333262 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799584306514 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114422137337 0.0667982634062 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160240595629 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127555324394 0.056905535591 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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