Task 1: Bar
Task 2: To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are a lot of arguments about how to be success in business. Many people believe that Maths plays an important role in a successful businessman. At some point, I agree with this idea.
Let’s begin by looking at the importance of Maths in business. The main reason is that Maths requires a lot of logical thinking. From calculating a simple plus to solving a complex argument, learners always need to be focus on every steps. Should they do a small mistake in a single step, the whole problem may be wrong. Managing a business is pretty similar: every decision of the manager may lead to a massive deal, so calculating everything carefully is vital. Moreover, even some activities in a company is realted directly to Maths too, such as accounting and banking. As we can see, Mathematics cannnot be missed in a man’s business.
On the other hand, someone do not need to know Maths that well to become a successful businessman. For example, having an accountant may solve everything related to money of a company. In my opinion, to run a business smoothly, the most important thing is the director’s vision. That is the reason why although some of inventors are very smart, they often end up giving their company to some one who have a leaders’ virtues.
In conclusion, I believe that knowing Maths is essential to succeed in business, but you do not have to know Maths well.
In conclusion, the main cause of the hate of feedback and evaluation is the emotion with them, and the best way to solve the problem is giving feedback in a friendly way.On the other hand, it is also important to be careful with the way you evaluate others as some person might consider it as criticism, which will lead to a negative effect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...business. On the other hand, someone do not need to know Maths that well to bec...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the inventors') or simply say ''some inventors''.
Suggestion: some of the inventors; some inventors
...vision. That is the reason why although some of inventors are very smart, they often end up givin...
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Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...ey often end up giving their company to some one who have a leaders’ virtues. In conc...
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Line 10, column 153, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a friendly way" with adverb for "friendly"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...to solve the problem is giving feedback in a friendly way.On the other hand, it is also important...
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Line 10, column 171, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...em is giving feedback in a friendly way.On the other hand, it is also important to...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, may, moreover, so, well, even so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72131147541 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70812527195 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8554585935 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161552497448 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534882292752 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686222701246 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106729849906 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889834225651 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.