Task 2 Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends clothing tech To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Task 2: Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, tech). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a popular phenomenon that nowadays the young generation is often attracted by trendy clothes or technological devices. From my point of view, I completely disagree with this tendency.

In terms of finance, because of being impacted by surrounding friends and environment, youngsters often desire to be a fashionable person, which allows them to expose their personality and wealth. Even if their financial condition is not good, they tend to find every possible way to be luxurious and trendy. For example, a man who is addicted to showing up himself even commits illegal activities to meet his unlimited demands. This leads them to bad shopping habits and affects hugely their lifestyle. In contrast, instead of squandering their budget on high-end clothes or modern devices, they could spend their money on other important and useful sectors such as education, or helping the poor.

In terms of time, it is not a strange scene when people could encounter a student who is browsing on online shopping websites to search for some modern and new clothes or accessories. This makes these students not have time for their academic study and research, which might pose a threat to their career prospects. Take my niece as an example, in lieu of spending time on improving her knowledge, caring too much about her appearance by shopping and using a state-of-the-art smartphone jeopardized her academic performance.

In conclusion, although clothing or technological devices are necessary things in our daily life, I do not advocate the materialistic lifestyle which affects adversely their studying result or working performance.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31538461538 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97309433769 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657692307692 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4039262738 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.636363636 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125509982199 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041104317659 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321558778013 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716464056853 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026174295237 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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