Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, tech) .To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Hitherto, globalization has led to the interference of worldwide fashion culture, and the question of whether the young should pay too much attention to them or not has been raising public concerning. While many people lament that it is common for youngsters to follow their interests, I oppose this view by giving some rational evidence.
It is perceptible that all teenagers are allowed to follow their interest, parents should adapt it in order not to let children stress after a day of studying. Almost all adolescents in this modern era are appealed by fashion or high technology devices, this was proved by the flourish of the science and clothing industries through recent decades. Some countries like America or Italy heighten their reputation by creating well-known companies, therefore, economics recorded a high surgent of the in-come in recent years. However, instead of balancing study and hobbies, some teenagers tend to focus too much on these two industries, so that creates many aftermaths in the future.
In terms of the aftermath, there are tons of foreseeable drawbacks giving by psychologists. The uppermost concern is the time consuming, as a prevailing student, I recognize that children in this day and age prefer caring their personal appearance to their inside soul. There was a news that compares the number of book owners and technology opposers among students, the surprising result that the second number outweighed the first one. This survey not only pointed out the shortage of knowledge of the young generation, but it also raising parents' awareness of their kids. On top of that, the essence of clothes and technology is always changing to create a new market opportunity, so catching up with these trends can cost youngsters a huge budget. Furthermore, in order to adapt to the high demand of customers about products, many brands try to pursue their company to manufacture as much outcome as possible, so that will not assure about the quality of clothes or high-tech devices. A vivid example is that in Vietnam, the fashion market witnessed an outbreak of local brands, however, some owners of these shop copied ideas from other brand and made it into their own products, it is considered as knowledge appropriation.
In conclusion, children are able to have their interests, but they should not spend too much money on them to avoid bad consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...rence of worldwide fashion culture, and the question of whether the young should pay too much attention...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...earance to their inside soul. There was a news that compares the number of book owners...
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Line 3, column 521, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge of knowledge of the young generation, but it also raising parents awareness of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, second, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12276214834 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82114228755 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570332480818 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.5129848233 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.071428571 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147460081376 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457452243382 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384328368983 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100975155186 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298559324333 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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