Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Over the past decade, advertising has become a prevalent and publicly recognized phenomenon, making a paradigm shift in buying behavior of every consumers in the world. While some people believe the advertising is not impact on they sell, even it is the factor influence to the high sales of popular consumer goods, I strongly support the opposite would be true.
The primary reason why advertising be required to sell is that it provide information to customer about special feature, cost of a product. For example, when a company have a new product, in order to bring this product approach to customers, they need to invest million dollar for advertising like using the hand of celebrities, advertise on TV, billboard. Son Tung MTP could raise of the sales of Bitis’s shoes as he is one the most well-known singer in Vietnam, which is a prime example of significant advertising influence on customers buying behavior. In the past time without advertising,in order to buy some product, consumers must go around the street to find, it is difficult to search something.
Another the chief argument in favour of necessity of advertising is that the good way to develop the brand of manufacturers in the market. In fact, companies in the would invest 30 percent of revenue into marketing include largely advertising. And The cost of the method would be useful or a waste of money relying mostly on the way it is used.
In conclusion, although the idea of advertising isn't attribute to increasing revenue in the view of some people, I firmly believe that investing into advertising is necessary in commercial.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00743494424 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92906608751 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598513011152 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.4494473302 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.7 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150520402776 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538187335436 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442138637882 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849773471755 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459454255246 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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