Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The relation between advertisement of goods and sale rates is debatable due to the unsteady and unpredictable features of both. Some people believe that fashionable goods’ consumption reflects the power of adverts rather than the genuine demands of the community. In my opinion, advertisement has not enough strength to affects people’s choices at all.
To begin with, popular culture is established by today’s people ,who are indeed well-educated, and have wise to determine what they are really want or not. In other words, public literacy has increased in the past decades and stemmed liberal individuals who are rarely dominated external factors such as TV commercials or radio spots. For example, an online technology giant, Amazon company shared a survey results in 2018. According to this, the consumers who buy popular items make their choices depending on the comparison results on the websites, in spite of taking care of advertisements. Thus, nowadays it is hard to say that people buy things just depending on the adverts.
Furthermore, an advertisement usually becomes successful if this commercial product is a real need for this society. To put simply, when a correct product, which is a vital demand for all public, is launched in exact time, this increase the booming of the product in the market even not needs too intense advertisement bombarding. A case in this point, although many people likes ice-cream, the sales of the ice-cream reach the top in summer seasons as result of the raised demand in the public. So that, advertisement may be a just catalyser not the main dominator of the popular products’ sales.
To sum up, in spite of suggesting that people buy unneeded popular goods under the influence of powerful advertisement, I believe that people have enough intellectuality to determine their needs and buy them without influenced by external factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, really, so, thus, well, for example, such as, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28947368421 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06025024777 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628289473684 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.504717922 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.692307692 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173995559343 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560135407049 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390847075283 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976325069481 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213848792081 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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