Regarding the evolution and development of technology, people have started using smart devices from younger ages than in the past. Consequently, children tend to spend too much hours on their computers, which can have serious damaging effects on both their mental and physical health. As far as I am concerned, I believe that an extensive use of computers can have mainly negative impacts on young children.
To begin with, a first argument is that most kids use computers to play video games. Furthermore, they are not aware of the consequences of spending too much time in front of a device. One of the greatest negative outcomes can be that of severe illnesses that one can encounter. For instance, the overuse of computers cannot only affect one’s eye sight, but also their health in general. If children spend hours inside and do not go outside to play of take fresh air, they might start to suffer from vitamin deficits or even asthma.
Secondly, another argument is that if youngsters spend most of their free time inside playing computer games, they may become antisocial introverts who are not able to communicate with others or make new friends. This might have negative effects over the years, as after they graduate and get a well-paid job, they will not be able to communicate or work in teams, which can be harmful to their reputation and will prevent them from getting further promotions.
Nonetheless, there are individuals who claim that computers are useful tools for homework and projects that children might need to do. In addition, internet is a great source of information that youngsters ought to use in order to be up to date with all the events that are happening in the world. However, this people are not aware of the consequences of the excessive use of such smart devices.
In conclusion, even though computers are useful utilities that almost everyone uses on a daily basis, children should not be allowed to spend too much time using them. They ought to be permanently supervised when using these electronics, in order for them not to suffer in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...onsequently, children tend to spend too much hours on their computers, which can hav...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly negative impacts on young children. To begin with, a first argument is that ...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...e of computers cannot only affect one’s eye sight, but also their health in general. If c...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...at are happening in the world. However, this people are not aware of the consequence...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92676056338 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63377118306 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543661971831 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7423771137 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1333333333 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0299233741521 0.244688304435 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0127907307336 0.084324248473 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0168193533089 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0194086502127 0.151304729494 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116478298708 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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