Regarding the evolution and development of technology, people have started using smart devices from younger ages than in the past. Consequently, children tend to spend too much hours on their computers, which can have serious damaging effects on both their mental and physical health. As far as I am concerned, I believe that an extensive use of computers can have mainly negative impacts on young children.
To begin with, a first argument is that most kids use computers to play video games. Furthermore, they are not aware of the consequences of spending too much time in front of a device. One of the greatest negative outcomes can be that of severe illnesses that one can encounter. For instance, the overuse of computers cannot only affect one’s eye sight, but also their health in general. If children spend hours inside and do not go outside to play of take fresh air, they might start to suffer from vitamin deficits or even asthma.
Secondly, another argument is that if youngsters spend most of their free time inside playing computer games, they may become antisocial introverts who are not able to communicate with others or make new friends. This might have negative effects over the years, as after they graduate and get a well-paid job, they will not be able to communicate or work in teams, which can be harmful to their reputation and will prevent them from getting further promotions.
Nonetheless, there are individuals who claim that computers are useful tools for homework and projects that children might need to do. In addition, internet is a great source of information that youngsters ought to use in order to be up to date with all the events that are happening in the world. However, this people are not aware of the consequences of the excessive use of such smart devices.
In conclusion, even though computers are useful utilities that almost everyone uses on a daily basis, children should not be allowed to spend too much time using them. They ought to be permanently supervised when using these electronics, in order for them not to suffer in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...onsequently, children tend to spend too much hours on their computers, which can hav...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly negative impacts on young children. To begin with, a first argument is that ...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...e of computers cannot only affect one’s eye sight, but also their health in general. If c...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...at are happening in the world. However, this people are not aware of the consequence...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94366197183 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63377118306 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543661971831 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7423771137 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1333333333 5.45110844103 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246722492764 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856905988143 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684084124893 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144210380936 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699623192066 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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