Volunteer work organised by middle schools brings more benefits than problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Volunteer work organised by middle schools brings more benefits than problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many schools nowadays emphasise the importance of cultivating students' mind and abilities outside the academic work, so many volunteer work has been organised. From my point of view, such a trend brings more positive outcomes than problems.

Firstly, by attending volunteer work in students' early ages, students can know better about social responsibilities. For instance, many students will collect rubbish on the road or look after the elders in infirmaries on weekends. The participate these activities as volunteers and learn the importance of protecting environment and taking care of old people. As a result, many of them will become socially responsible individuals who are the incentives of social development.

In addition, student can practice their communication and collaboration skills when doing voluntary services. The volunteer work normally attracts many students. Therefore, they should work as a team to accomplish the tasks, such as maintaining the order of an academic conference. The teamwork spirit and communication ability they develop by attending volunteer activities are valuable to their future employment.

However, spending too much time and energy in volunteer work must have an adverse impact on students' study. Middle school era is the most precious time period for students to lay a firm grounding to their future career. Students can learn the basic knowledge, including math, English, physics, in middle school. If they pay too much attention to volunteer services, it is inevitable that their academic performance can be affected negatively, and thereby making them less prepared for developing a successful career.

In sum, doing volunteer work can teach students how to be socially responsible citizens and master collaboration and communication skills, which are vital to develop career success. However, students should also reach a balance between their study and voluntary work. In a word, participating volunteer work brings more benefits than problems.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the elders in infirmaries on weekends. The participate these activities as volunteers and lear...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68106312292 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01839629891 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591362126246 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9497929254 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.588235294 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7058823529 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223065222434 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840469167704 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955392025376 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141218268247 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076045806584 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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