Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies.
Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirement for success?
Being successful in young age is a completely desire to many people. They try to complete their studies and overcome all the hardest part they experienced during their study. Fresh graduated usually immediately proceed to apply for a job in order to achieve successful life in the future. In the following paragraphs, I will be stating some reasons regarding on this issue and also analyse the requirement for success.
Even though there is a belief that it is very recommended to complete the studies to get a decent occupation. But, some do not finish their school and just started to work where they accept a high school graduated or open an individual business. Eventually, they, who left school earlier, got more succesful compared to people with bachelor degree. They have more work experience and gain more knowledge related to business. But those with degree, they never experience a work life and have zero knowledge about it. Therefore, those reasons that written previously, become the significant comparison to two type of people.
Like being said above, having enough experience and knowing much about marketing strategies and other skills are the requirement for success. People who have this criteria, will most likely to success easier and faster.
In conclusion, other than the requirement to become succesful, one has to seek an opportunity to start something and it also depends on your luck and destiny. A lot of people can be successful in their own way because many also believe their work paths already been pathed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('completely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('desire') instead of another adjective.
Being successful in young age is a completely desire to many people. They try to complete th...
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Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put before the verb 'graduated'.
Suggestion: usually graduated
...y experienced during their study. Fresh graduated usually immediately proceed to apply for a job ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...analyse the requirement for success. Even though there is a belief that it is very recom...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended completing'.
Suggestion: recommended completing
...hough there is a belief that it is very recommended to complete the studies to get a decent occupation....
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...equirement for success. People who have this criteria, will most likely to success e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, therefore, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1185770751 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68263289316 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616600790514 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.1237752265 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.5 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388686264419 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118657914364 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572282997537 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203151040035 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065074172524 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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