The Widespread Use of the Internet Has Brought Many Problems. What Do You Think Are the Main Problems Associated with the Use of the Web? What Solutions Can You Suggest?

Even though there is no doubt of development that is caused by the computer technology which the internet played main role on it. here, I would like to account for reasons for drawbacks of the internet as the most favorite pastime in the present era.

Numerous reasons can be put down behind the internet problems. First and foremost, accessing children to the world wide web not only has included inappropriate websites but also in most cases give wrong information to them. That would lead to undeniable effects on their minds. I think the most obvious solution is directly relating to parents who should protect their children with secure internet. For example, they should know and manage how their children spend their time surfing in the internet and which websites they visit. By doing this they may not put in egregious cyber problems.

Another option that should be concern about is rising sedentary life style. Computer systems do whatever you need just by clicking. For instance, online shopping, paying bills online and even opening doors by remote controls, while we had to move for doing these things before. As a result of this sitting life style, illnesses such as obesity and heart attacks are increased. A good idea is for the government to aware people by advertising on the internet. This would encourage them to work out and do exercise regularly.

In conclusion, although the internet has been used to make life easier, its disadvantages on immature age categories will be adverse if it does not control by parents and educational systems.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02681992337 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5572466789 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647509578544 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.777186757 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4666666667 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150902876889 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463522346603 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396429838399 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763343261071 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221264049437 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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