14.09.2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Many aver that it is parents’ duty to educate their offspring how to be a decent citizen. At the same time, some claim that schools ought to be responsible for forging benevolent members of the community. Below both prospect will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
On the one hand, parents who by default know their progeny better may effectively pass on them social norms and mores. To illustrate, a mother starts to explain to her daughter what is wrong and good at an early age by talking to her, prizing right and punishing vicious conduct. When kids become older parents, who are perceived by dependent children as a paragon and ideal, teach the youngsters via demonstration how to correctly interact with a family and with others. In other words, parents have auspicious circumstances that allow them to form offspring’s understanding of social norms.
On the other hand, there are well-prepared educators who were trained at university how to work with young people efficiently. Those professionals may change the society via shaping children’s mores and social standards in a desirable direction. For example, the attitude to LGBT society in western countries such as Germany, Canada, the USA, France and the UK has been changing dramatically within this decade. This alteration has been achieved via novel educational programs that were implemented at elementary and secondary school by the staff. In other words, a school system is a powerful tool of a state that must be used to steer community to a right direction.
In conclusion, although parents could influence and shape descendants’ consciousness, such social institution as school ought to be responsible for the task because it gives a chance to get rid of obsolete norms and create more proper ones.
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Essay evaluation report
such social institution as school ought to be responsible
such social institutions as schools ought to be responsible
flaws:
The topic asked '...give your own opinion'. but no where gives your opinions inside the essay.
The last paragraph is not an opinion, but a conclusion:
In conclusion, although parents could influence and shape descendants’ consciousness, such social institution as school ought to be responsible for the task because it gives a chance to get rid of obsolete norms and create more proper ones.
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We will need to make the opinions clear. The proper ways to match the topic:
1. In the beginning of the third paragraph. we may say:
On the other hand, I would argue that school is the better place to learn this. first..., second...
2. Put the opinion at the conclusion:
In my opinion, both are important. .... or
In my opinion, school is the place. .... or
In my opinion, parents should take the duties. ....
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1470 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.824 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.605 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23469387755 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10184873794 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625850340136 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7118609413 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.384615385 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177155730208 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576916217561 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349023542652 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103307265449 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460365811354 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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