Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as the Olympics or the World Cup. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults for exercise. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
In this modern era, without any qualms, it is affirmed that adults follow a sedentary lifestyle. Some people reckon that adults should be motivated to live healthy lives by endorsing international games. Whereas, others coincide that it could be done through other feasible methods. Thereby, I agree with the latter viewpoint and in this essay, I shall explain both sides of the argument by analysing it.
On the one hand, there are a plethora of ways available to motivate grown-ups to exercise. Firstly, the government should create recreational centres in all the locality of the city, and that should be subsidized by them. Subsequently, this encourages people from low-income level to indulge in exercising without burdening their pocket. Secondly, the law-makers should promote the benefits of daily activities like cycling, walking, and gardening, and so on through television and radio advertisements. For instance, according to doctors a brisk walk for 30 minutes in the morning reduce fat and regenerate the human body.
On the flip side, people across the board state that endorsing international events would be a viable solution to motivate grown-ups. First, the major benefits of these games are fame, success and money. So, to achieve rigorous training is a must. Furthermore, the players fit and healthy body allure their followers to live in the same way. For instance, after WWE millions of youngster enticed to build their physiques like their favourite wrestling stars. However, there are concerns about affordability and insufficient time due to contemporary work-life, since this would be a very short-term solution.
In conclusion, though the sporting events helps to motivate youngsters to do exercise, this measure is short live. Consequently, the government should offer leisure activity centres and sensitized them about the benefits of doing regular exercise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lives by endorsing international games. Whereas, others coincide that it could be done ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49488054608 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89871821645 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634812286689 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9581490165 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7058823529 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229625436234 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063487944143 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646996517295 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133412240289 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049978650858 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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