For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’ How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?
In the continuous evolving modern world, there are a lot of transitions occurring in all sectors including the educational sector. Edification once was confined to science, technology and languages. However, these days music and sports are assimilated into education. Some say that playing musical instrument should be given equal prominence as much as reading and writing. I do not agree with this view.
In the first place, I feel Rudimentary education such as reading and writing should not be compared with music and arts. Teaching the abilities of writing and reading are imperative because they constitute to the growth of an individual irrespective of the career one choose. Additionally, with these abilities, a person is considered a literate which in turn reflects the literacy rate of the nation. Government focuses on literacy to envisage the phase of development of the country. India, one of the rapidly developing nations placed major emphasis on elementary education so that more youngsters get employed in diverse sectors.
Nevertheless it is always a good idea to introduce children to arts at an early age. Making them learn music could develop them into professional musicians but music and art is one such field where everybody would not be able to make a career. These interests should either be existing innately or be nurtured. Pupils have to be given a choice to opt to these talents rather than imposing on them. Some may be interested in sports, some in arts, some in science and some in music. A recent survey by Professors at University of California indicated that 67% of students under the age 15 studying at music schools are forced to learn music while there interests differed.
In conclusion, though teaching musical instruments to children is a positive facet, I strongly feel,it should be their choice, while reading and writing have more relevance to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16828478964 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8383223889 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608414239482 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6250935693 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9411764706 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192856995221 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619214799096 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677865074059 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124100446423 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442642318217 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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