All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others thinks having a range of subject is better for a children's future.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Children's futures have been centric attention for every parents. While some guardians support that coaching of other different skills should be part of their education, others consider a view that teaching variety of different subject can enhance their skills. In my opinion, i belive that every student should get a chance to improve intellectual level during their education.
On one side of the argument, there are some reasons why people hold the view that variety of subjects such as art and music should be included in their education. Firstly, Some subjects such as arts and music are not considered as an integral part of their tertiary study. To make their future in such subject students needs to get focused beyond their regular study routine and get some extra coaching. Therefore, if school introduce subjects from such artistic background than students who are interested can be benefited from it. Furthermore, science and technology is in center of every education system. For artistic students who are not considering their future in science and technology, education in specific subject can broaden their horizon with their career prospective.
Despite the above arguments, i am of the view that intellIegence and intellectual level is essential to get success in any stream. Indeed, one reason i take this position is that among the group of musicians basic skills are as important as technical to get focused. For example, every guitarist does not get a chance to lead the stage, while others have to play it in background to support their lead singer. In addition, if schools and university education provide such skills it would help every student to be more talented where a student can success in any field he or she goes. Therefore, i believe that learning general skills are more important because certain measures can always be helpful in every aspect of life.
In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in society, i support that intelligence can be more helpful to go forward in life rather than focusing only on subject of our preference. Given this situation, it is recommended that schools should provide such format of study that improve students intellectual level along with their interested subject.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18630136986 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67876003053 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509589041096 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7088924499 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.3125 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205408919939 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722069778015 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524250050348 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135850268168 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592666867807 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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