The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children?
Do you think that this is the best way to deal with the problem?
What other solutions can you suggest?
Obesity has become a problem for children today. Schools should take more attention on physical activities for children to diminish over weighting. But this is not an only option for resolving this problem. Family behavior toward their children would also be essential. In this essay, I outline why I think that doing exercises is eminent, among other solutions. Later, I will add some other possible implication for this difficulty.
Physical exercise would cause some benefits for children. First, doing exercise needs more energy. So the body will consume more carbohydrates, and the muscle loses its fatness to release more energy. Also, according to some research study, if children do exercise often, they wouldn’t feel stress. As a result, they wouldn’t eat junk food. Moreover, sports make to get along with each other. So, it prevents any obsession or depression, which are prominent factors for eating more. There by, happiness is caused by exercise and eventually create a better lifestyle among children, especially when they are going to opt for their food.
However, there are other solutions could enumerate for such a problem. Family behavior toward their children would also be necessary. This means that if family control what, they eat and choose their dishes wisely. Sincethen, children become cautious about their food behavior. Or, if family put some time for doing exercise in a week, then children possibly imitate it. So, a family is an essential part of children growth in many aspects like food behavior.
All in all, if school devote more time for children physical activity, remarkably will cut the danger of over weighting among them. Besides, family education about health and weight balance has important role for this problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'exercise'.
Suggestion: often exercise
... to some research study, if children do exercise often, they wouldn't feel stress. As a r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29432624113 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56618296411 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620567375887 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3518926778 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8636363636 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8181818182 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21063232955 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711946346317 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437367263553 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140457897218 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508557954669 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.2 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.51 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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