Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

First of all, money are means, as it is an important aspect in our life. It is something that we can not live without it. However, Children have to learn about the value of money. As it should be learnt in the presence of their parent as well as schools can play a role by identifying the value of money for their student. Besides it must enlighten immatures about how to save money by making full management and control their daily expenditures instead of wasting it. So i agree with this statement that children should acquire some skills about how to manage money. 

As per mentioned above, being ones’ well understood about financial managent. It will support them by choosing the proper in how, where, and what to spend money on. So matures should increase the awareness of money usage for their children. So when they grow, they will justify the means of its end. Furthermore, they will avoid of their money being wasteful. For example, there was one child his name is Robonson. His mother bought for him box. so that he can drop in it proportion from his expenditure on daily basis. As she persuaded him to save money from the step step of his age. As a result, he can consume when he become young. So that, he can invest it for something useful in the future like investing it on studying, Because education fees are very expensive in his home country. 

Moreover, money is important, as it can be used for many things in our life while saving insteading of spending in useless stuff. Saving is highly respected if it is taken into accounts. Someone could consume it for buying home, laptop, and cell phone. So that one’s can rely on it.

To sum up, money is very useful, in case of being consumed properly. Knowing of money values will help to success in life. 

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, as a result, as well as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63322884013 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41699092006 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579937304075 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.10420841683 475% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.0938758908 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.380952381 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1904761905 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151260435998 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460657688469 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498851384202 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867227522087 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666850516423 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.0946893788 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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