Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why?
Experience is definitely an asset for the student to choose their study path Because it leads students to decide wisely. However, there are some pro and cons exist if you are working at an early stage. In this essay, I will raise why student get more acquainted if they get some experience before study and briefly explain what negative aspects would cause if they are working at an early age.
To begin with, the more students know what they are good at, the more they encourage to obtain knowledge. Jobs will give students if they use their skills and talents. At present in schools, some trainee program has designed for an adult to do it during the summer. It has now become popular among parents. Because in this way, parents eventually figure out their children’s skill and qualification. Besides, students enhance their skills through some internship in real life. So actual practice in life will prepare them better- off for the future, and hopefully, now the education system has a significant role in this regard.
On the flip side, the aforementioned benefits are negligible if people wouldn’t get the right advice at an early stage of life. If young people get paid while they are working, it might impact on their motivation for study. For instance, if they work hard and get paid well by the employee, and consequently they understand earning money is not a hard job, they might lose their attraction for harnessing the knowledge. Likewise, university nowadays is not free in many countries, and parents should burden the cost of education for their child so, if students couldn’t understand why they should pay for getting knowledge whereas they could easily take it from others freely. As a result, the trainee program for young students couldn’t be beneficial.
In sum, childhood experience, without any doubt, would affect people destiny. Trainee program in school would make them wiser for their choice on major if they relatively see it as an experience, not as a full-time job. In my opinion, if a student has a chance to work on their interest, they have a bright future in comparison with others that chose their path according to their family value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'obtaining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: obtaining
...ey are good at, the more they encourage to obtain knowledge. Jobs will give students if t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...path according to their family value.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, briefly, consequently, however, if, likewise, so, well, whereas, while, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0027100271 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66949362131 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550135501355 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6573219204 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.555555556 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304985753376 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899479248982 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589669411474 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183839887833 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421466407026 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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